by Rachael Phillips
The week my first grandchild was born, I stayed
a week with my daughter and her family. Looking back, even her husband, a Dr.
Doolittle clone, admits they owned too many pets. The birth of their beautiful
baby girl constituted enough drama. The addition of a large, needy dog, whom I
privately nicknamed Droolius Rex, and eight cats (a total of 148 kitty claws) in
the house detracted from the main event, rather than adding to it.
In a similar way, pet words and phrases can
diminish, rather than enhance a story. Like my daughter’s cats, 148 “suddenlys”
leave 148 claw marks that puncture a suspense novel and drain it of its potency.
Suddenly, readers fall asleep.
The overuse of another pet word, “literally,”
and its cousin, “actually,” jumps on readers the way Droolius jumped on me at
his dinnertime. Instead of being convinced by such adverbs, readers feel an
urge to back away. Or chain them outdoors. Excess “verys” and “reallys,” even
in dialogue, can produce a similar effect.
All pets exhibit a sneaky side, and words are
no exception. Some, however, possess exceptional covert abilities. Words such
as “it,” and “there” can take over a story before an author realizes they have
slipped en masse through the back door. Before we know it, litters of “the” and
“that” increase exponentially. Pronouns, too, can overpopulate a manuscript if
preventive measures are not taken.
Perhaps
you, like me, cherish particular words for your own reasons. I like the word
“angst” because it sounds like its meaning. When I crunch the word between
gritted teeth, I feel my character’s fear and frustration—expressed in
streamlined five-letter form. However, my critique partner pounced on its
overuse in my romance as telling rather than showing. Some people just don’t
understand pet lovers . . . and in my case, that’s a good thing.
How about you? Have you made a watch-list of
your pet words to keep them under control?
"I love Autocrit.com for this very reason. It points out all those overused pets, I mean, words," she said as she cuddled with her three dogs and two cats.
ReplyDeleteGreat idea, Karla! Maybe I can beat my crit partner to the punch with my next ms.!
ReplyDeleteThree dogs and two cats?! Don't you have enough excitement in your life as is? :-)
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ReplyDeleteIn my last manuscript, my copyeditor told me my characters "glanced" too much. She suggested changing some of them to "looked." Now my characters "look" too often. I can't win.
ReplyDeleteFun reminder. Always helping us see things differently, Rachael.
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