Especially if you publish or hope to publish traditionally,
you probably already know word counts should be kept in check. Oh, I have
edited some novels that were well over the typical length, but I also know those
authors’ appeal and sales had to be “worth” the extra paper in print and the higher
price point for the consumer.
So how do you pare down your word count without losing what’s
essential to your style, your voice, and your story? We know about ridding manuscripts
of unnecessary words, like very, just, really, so, and that. And we know about killing your darlings,
purple prose, tight writing, and so on. But here are a few other ideas:
·
Look for characters
who repeat themselves. Sure, we repeat ourselves in real life, especially when
we are upset or excited. And we want dialogue to be realistic. But our
characters don’t have to follow suit. If a character says “I can’t stop
thinking about what happened” over and over in one conversation, well, does she
need to?
·
Look for repeated
description. Really, after the first couple of times you tell your readers
the hero’s eyes are blue, they probably already have him firmly formed in their
minds, baby blues and all. It’s okay to say, “She looked into his eyes” sometimes,
sans color. One author and I just had a laugh over her tendency to describe the
use of napkins at almost every meal her characters enjoy. Sometimes we can let readers
assume common action rather than repeatedly describing it.
·
Look for unnecessary
phrases, not just words. Did you know you can almost always replace “in
order to” with “to”? Try it! Google “unnecessary phrases” and you’ll find lists
of what you can safely delete or replace.
·
Look for pet
phrases, not just words. I don’t want to be unkind, but I once heard
someone say “as far as that goes” so often I thought I might scream. Sometimes I
feel that way when I read a book where the author uses the same phrase over and
over--and that goes for a character who uses the same phrase over and over too!
I recommend keeping a list of pet phrases as well as words to address. If you decide
to replace any, try to ensure your new phrase has fewer words.
·
Look for
redundant words. Added bonus? Final
outcome? We don't need two words. Check this
and this. (Notice
I did not say check this out, but
I wanted to!)
What other ideas do you have?
After twenty-four
years with publishing house Zondervan in Grand Rapids, Michigan, most recently
as an executive managing editor, Jean Bloom returned to Central Indiana
to be near family and take her freelance editorial business full-time (Bloom in Words Editorial Services).
Her personal blog is Bloom in Words too, where she often posts articles about the writing
life. She and her husband, Cal, have three children and five grandchildren.
Photo credit: http://www.publicdomainpictures.net/view-image.php?image=97189&picture=blades-of-a-pair-of-scissors
Such a good reminder, Jean. Sometimes it's painful to cut those beloved babies out of our books. "Well" and "just" are words I tend to overuse. I recently read a book that I mostly skimmed because the dialogue was so tedious and repetitious. Don't know how that got past the editor, except it was about 7th in a series. May no Hoosier Inker write like that. Thanks!
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