As a writer, I sometimes receive compliments
about my books. A reader may appreciate my characters or my humor. Once I received
kudos about food in my stories (“When I read your books, I know somebody will
eat something scrumptious. I’ll devour a blow-by-blow description without
swallowing a single calorie!”)
But no one has ever said,
“Rachael, I just can’t get enough of your verbs!”
Yet try writing a story without
them. In romances, heroines and heroes would not flirt, flounce, fight or kiss.
In mysteries, nobody would deduce, shiver, quiver or solve. Or die. Who reads
mysteries in which everyone stays alive? Verbs keep the story interesting.
Given their importance, perhaps
they should receive more attention. Too often, my verbs degenerate into couch
potatoes, content to be, not do. “I AM” never denotes lethargy when the
expression refers to God Almighty, the source of all creativity and energy. But
too many forms of “be” (am, are, is, was, were, been) stagnate my scenes.
Superfluous “ing” verbs also
drain a scene of vitality. They often clump together, clogging my manuscript,
but a quick search helps me identify and smooth them, restoring movement to the
story. Do you use “going to” in your writing, as in, “She is going to study
platypuses in Australia”? Colloquial phrases such as this work in dialogue, but
in narrative, the scholar and maybe even the platypuses (if they’re English
majors) will fare better if she “plans to study” or “aspires to study.”
Bottom line, present or past
tenses project much stronger action than “ing” verbs, so use the former
whenever possible.
Verbs in active voice (“The
octogenarian drives a purple convertible”) also trump verbs in passive voice
(“A purple convertible is driven by the octogenarian”).
Lastly, experiment with vivid
verbs. Overuse produces a big-plaid-with-floral-print effect (“She detonated
the room with her presence and disseminated hellos, guzzling drinks and demolishing
hors d’oeuvres”). But a well-placed, unique action can polish a paragraph to a
spit-shine.
So drag those verbs off the sofa
and prod them into action. If we exercise to stay in shape, why shouldn’t they?
Rachel, I do use "ing" verbs now and then, as in "Leaving the room, Character did something." But they do have their place if not overused. Image starting every sentence with noun, verb, object. At least "ing" verbs provide some variety.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment, Kathryn! "Ing" verbs do provide variety. I agree that "overuse" is the key word here. I include "ing" verbs in my writing, as well as forms of "be" and verbs in passive voice, treating them like a sprinkling of croutons and cheese on soup or a dollop of whipped cream on pie. They add flavor and interest, but should not comprise the main content.
ReplyDeleteNow, I'm hungry. ...
Ooh, I like that 'detonated the room with her presence' line of yours! This makes me want to scour my WIP for active verbs.
ReplyDeleteRaquel Byrnes
Glad that expression resonated with you, Raquel! I've known people like that, haven't you?
DeleteI liked your use of the word "scour," too. Happy verb-hunting!